Dear Clancy and Tom:
Both of your stories are wonderfully entertaining! I liked hearing the story instead of reading it for a change. It gave my eyes a break.
Both of you had excellent progression in your stories! I like how both of you described the scene, set up a problem, and then solved it! That’s a great way to tell a story and to set up a plot, or story line.
Clancy: I was sorry to hear that the boy fell off the merry-go-round, but I bet the puppy was a great surprise. If that happened to you, what surprise would you like waiting for you? I would like ice cream!
Tom: I loved the idea of finding James on a merry-go-round! I guess he didn’t have motion sickness. Was Dylan relieved to find his father at the mansion?
Excellent comments Leah. You gave these students plenty of constructive and positive feedback. Good questions.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work. SS